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Fine Dining by ~karter:iconkarter:

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I feel like Eva Braun
              on a first date

I've fallen in love
               with a bad idea

just

                 because                                                    I'm

                                                            alone

    inthe
                                              corner                                          booth

doesn't
          mean
                                                 I was stood up

but


                   because                I

                                                                                                                          can't

cover
                                                         the cheque
                                                               does
       mean
                       I'll   burn   this


place
                                                                                                              to
                                                                                                              the
                                                                                                              ground
©2005-2009 ~karter
:iconkarter:

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I didn't have the spaghetti

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:iconchasingxaimee:
~chasingxaimee Dec 21, 2005, 5:13:13 PM
wow.
excellent work.

i absolutely love it. :)

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+:aimee:+
:iconkarter:
~karter Dec 21, 2005, 5:16:55 PM
Thanks alot!
..and thanks for the fav.

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This is where language fails.....right here.
:iconbatcountry:
~batcountry Dec 26, 2005, 12:01:48 PM
It's nifty

You've really got spacing down, it works and doesn't seem gratuitious

That said you get 1.5/10, see me after class
:iconkarter:
~karter Dec 27, 2005, 9:20:27 AM
But I don't want to see you after class.
The video in health class said what you do is called "bad touching"

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This is where language fails.....right here.
:iconbatcountry:
~batcountry Dec 27, 2005, 9:35:54 AM
"video in health class"

Filthy liberal lies
:iconkarter:
~karter Dec 27, 2005, 12:29:44 PM
Enough out of you, you right wing extremist (bowler)

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This is where language fails.....right here.
:iconmanchaliaina:
~manchaliaina Dec 27, 2005, 2:36:09 PM
I really like this. I'm not usually a fan of typographical, but somehow, I guess I've never seen it actually work for the poem. Usualy it works for the poet('s ego or something). I love this though.

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*But I believe in peace, bitch.*
:iconkarter:
~karter Dec 27, 2005, 3:49:43 PM
Thanks a lot
(It really can be an ego thing if your not careful)

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This is where language fails.....right here.
:iconbatcountry:
~batcountry Dec 28, 2005, 8:22:25 AM
Hey hey now

When it comes to bowling, I'm a right-wing radical
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